First, I love it. Really. There is so much here. I only have one tiny thought, and obviously feel free to ignore it, but what if it were an entirely different film?
I’m not talking about anything structural. Just the structure. Could we lose the protagonist, move the setting underwater, and make the central conflict more of a friendship? The tone should stay exactly the same, but funnier and also devastating.
I know you said this was based on your childhood. That’s what makes it so exciting. Have you considered having had a different childhood?
Anyway, these are just thoughts. Don’t overthink them. We’ll need to see all of them in the next draft.
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